Entity 70-"The Fake Computers"

Summary:

This my first article, i need to get least 3 critique.

Entity 70-"The Fake Computers"

The_Faillen_One 12 Apr 2025 17:10

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Article Title: The Fake Computers

Sensitive Content: There are 2 autopsy reports in the article, but they are not very stomach-churning.

Brief Description:Entity 70 is computer-minded humanoids who hunts in hiding; kills some people and kidnaps others. They can ambush to catch wanderers.
Critique Focus: Critique types doesn't matter. But conceptual critiques more important for me.
Additional Notes/Remarks: Careful to Writing Critique Rules beacuse i'm searching for greenlight.

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Last edited on 11 May 2025 12:04 by The_Faillen_One Show more

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Liurnia 10 May 2025 10:01

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The black owl spreads its wings once more.