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It's a hesitant upvote, like Saria's page, since it's a little clunky, but overall it's good.
I was apart of this page’s critique phase, but coming back to it I’m not sure if all of what I said was properly integrated. I suppose you wouldn’t really care as I’m leaving an up-vote on this, but the wording throughout the page can get pretty patchy and it ends too quickly for me to enjoy it much.
The black owl spreads its wings once more.
The only thing I haven't implemented is the dialogue not being separated. It's entirely a stylistic choice. I have implemented the dialogue with Beast, however.
I love the concept of the Beast Gentleman trapping his victims in the bodies of his fellow workers, however, I cannot ignore the clunky narrative and structure. The way the story progressed is so vague and focuses more on the horror aspects than actually clearing up what happened to the Spokeslady and why she can’t express her true feelings. I feel like so much more could’ve been clarified and described that kept the horror of it, we could’ve heard a bit from the inner narration about how they can’t speak, and most importantly, why they can’t speak. Overall, love the concept, but the execution could’ve been better.
The point of the Terror hotel is to explain information subtly..re read the entirety of the tale series and you will have much greater context. If you don't want to do that,Kaya Is Spokeslady. The Beast made allegories to rabbits throughout the entirety of the tale series along his staff. That's because they all knew she would become part of the staff. Sometimes an article does not have to serve everything on a plate, but I don't blame you if you didn't catch it on immediately. The execution is entirely on purpose, you're not supposed to know how she was transformed and the horrors that came with it. You're not supposed to see her free herself either. Hope this explanation helped.
kinda clunky but terror hotel is cool :3
CharaDotArchivist
The demon that comes when you call her name.
note to self (after watching the whole story): avoid the old stairs on level 4 do not immediately enter the damaged door and look inside before entering level 19 if at level 126 the erosion event starts find an exit as quickly as possible to avoid ending up, be careful and look before entering the houses on level 10 and in general avoid going to level 5 and if I enter by accident find an exit immediately (if possible to level 6) and at level 4 I do follow the order I will have to make an exception and from level 4 go to level 6 everything to avoid level 5
(account deleted)interesting entry with distracting spag issues.
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