This work harbored a multitude of grammatical errors that I removed through an edit. Please look through my edit when you have the chance and confirm that you are fine with everything I've done. (My fixes covered typos, subject-verb agreement errors, and the addition of punctuation in some areas.)
While I worked to cover a lot of the obvious errors, there is a lot that still remains iffy, and you should look at it when you can. This needs to be read over multiple times (maybe with another individual) as there are several odd wordings (such as "I would be delighted to see you again if I didn't know what was the reason for your reapparition.") that demand some attention.
I don't think I can, in good faith, give this an up-vote as a result. The concept is wonderful, but your execution absolutely dissuades me from enjoying it. The piece reads too awkwardly and would've benefited a lot from staying in the oven for another few weeks. I will be giving this a -1 for the time being; resolve my issues with it, and I may change it to a no-vote or even an up-vote.
