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"Neither here nor there": Look, what we have here is a mixed article of phenomena and level, describing the simple entry into the level through dreaming. Honestly, after reading it, I still don't know what qualifies this article to be simultaneously in the realms of phenomena and enigma, as it undoubtedly leans more towards the enigmatic. The only aspect that could be called a suspected phenomenon is the point about 'possibly entering through dreaming', but honestly, isn't that just a simple dream entrance? And then exiting through awakening. This is quite awkward because for readers who want to read about phenomena, what they see upon clicking is just a nonsensical, beautifully written description of a bizarre space. Don't get me wrong, the writing of this article is undoubtedly excellent, but that's about it. It's stylistically beautiful but lacks depth in thought content. It fails in the aspect of phenomena, so how about in terms of level? Let's see below.
"Too Subjective, Too Ambiguous": I do think being a bit ambiguous, leaving some room for the reader's imagination, is a better approach than a clinical tone. Don't misunderstand me, but before I agree with the ambiguous style, I still need a space for imagination and description. This level itself is just a dream, more like a 'yume nikki' type of space, full of fantasy and randomness. This kind of space construction idea is too lazy for me, as it doesn't require any thought about coherence, just for the author to whimsically paint their scenes without considering rationality. This does not meet my expectations for a level. Of course, I can't deny that these scenes are beautiful, and they indeed evoke my imagination when I read them.
Side note/off topic:
Do we need to put a format-screw tag on this one chat? O_o
The reason this is a phenomena, to me, is that we don't know if the level exists, but it is implied that many people are experiencing it. What are the expectations for a level? I personally am tired of retreading the same formatted articles over and over again. I wrote this to be short and simple to demonstrate what kind of writing this wiki can have, we can shift away from clinical tone and paint images to excite the imagination. That being said, I do see your points. This is a very experimental page for me, but I wanted to try something new to encourage other authors to do the same, to try to push the boundaries of Backrooms writing.
Thanks,
Atlas
I still can't see why you put this article into a phenomenon position ——The opening paragraph actually makes the entire article look out of place, as if you are cramming together elements of a phenomenon.
It would be much better to just throw away the opening paragraph and treat the rest as a story ——because in my opinion, your article lacks interactivity. So there's no need to occupy a list position.
This is actually my personal preference: In my opinion, for non tale articles on websites like Backrooms, which occupy archive space, they must have the ability for me to imagine and re create along with this article after reading it.
But your article did not clearly explain the interrelationships between the contents, and set the tone and elements of the content too firmly, which made it impossible for me to further imagine your article.
It suppose appear in places like Wanderers' library, not some kind of Backrooms archives——and make“enigmatic level” “phenomenon”appear in tags of a single article, which is not an experimental attempt, but a purely meaningless blasphemy for me.
Also, it's not supposed to have coherence. At least for me, my dreams have no coherence at all, and I tried to recreate the feeling of randomness in dreams. Regardless, Thanks for sharing your thoughts. I really appreciate hearing them.
it creates this feeling i can't quite exactly describe. good job!
a +1 from chara :3
CharaDotArchivist
The demon that comes when you call her name.
Thank you so much for reading! I'm really glad you enjoyed my writing <3
I absolutely LOVE how you stemmed away from the templete that is commonly used. This is so good and I love the way you tell it like a tale but still give us a lot of information on what a wanderer will experience. Truly amazing, great job.
I'm really glad you enjoyed it, I'm going to be experimenting with more formats and writing, please check out my next works!
DivineAtlas,
The writing here is like a beautiful stained glass window in sunlight.
The scene in the window changes whenever I look away.
This is wondrous and troublesome and irresistible and chaotic!
Just now, I went back and read it again. Is it different? Again?
The words are the same … but …
Is this a phenomenon? Well, really, is it?
+1 from Goerman. Whatever it is!
P.S. I would, perhaps, slightly change your opening remarks to more strongly verify that many wanderers have experienced these recurring dreams. Then, present your article as one recorded instance, hinting that the variety and similarities of other dreams simultaneously validate and negate the phenomenon. It begs to be researched.
Your friend and colleague,
Goerman
http://backrooms-wiki.wikidot.com/goerman
Thanks for reading my work, as usual. I think you're right, ill make some edits tonight!
Good. Amazing. +1. I dont know.
I know, I can do it.
I don't know either. Thanks for reading, I'm really glad you enjoyed it!
Lately I feel as if I've needed something more directly up my alley to read and this is exactly what I've been looking for! Love the way you word and paint the picture of the environment as well the way the character's own perception and feelings are incorporated
Also in general dreams interest me heavily so that helps
Great job, I loved it! :3
Really glad you enjoyed it! Thanks for reading!
Responded super late, but this article is incredible.
I enjoyed critting it because of the top notch writing, so take this +1, because you earned it!
Thank you so much for your help and support!
I found the writing to evoke incredible imagery. The mystery only adds to its appeal for me. It's simple, but I love vibrant and otherworldly imagery like that. I could go on and on about how I really liked this, but sometimes, you can say more in less words.
+1 from me
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