+1
Honestly, I was waiting for this to be posted! An enjoyable read and gets you immersed really well.
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I'm waiting for this!
And congratulation for your first post!
Interesting premise. Effective execution.
Strong +1
the images are delightful. i don't really like the monotone life theme, it's a bit too low-contrast so i find it a bit guh to read. that being said, the monochrome aesthetic really does help this page out a lot! especially since the teal text jumps out at you.
being real, i don't actually like pages that put quotes in like this without any context, which is a bit weird since i wrote level 10 but i don't like that page anymore. THAT BEING SAID i actually think this is one exception where it's totally warranted, it kind of fits with the level's dreamlike quality — it's a sort of 'and you were there, and you were there' dream thing. SO it's actually nice that there's just quotes there.
i love the tone and general idea behind this piece. it was really engaging and emotional, good job.
You promised you'd take me there again some day… but you never did.
Nice! I love the idea of this level, and the writing and SPaG is overall great. I also like the hazy and gloomy mood that is being displayed in the images.
Looking forward to more articles made by you :D
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strong story potential and vibey prose, and on top of everything i said last year which i do still stand by :>
+1
This page is rough. It's definitely my best page on site but it tries way too hard. It's very simple which works for a first page but also I think it might be too simple. There's definitely more I could have done with the concept but it's not worth rewriting.
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