Choiceeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee
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I'm really loving story level like this!
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Wait, so what was the right/correct choice? And is this some sort of time loop?
Well, the gist is that there was no real choice. No matter what he did, it would've resulted in him getting knocked out. One thing I heavily imply is that MC is either dead or really lost in the backrooms. But, I like to leave it to interpretations work. If you think it's a timeloop, than it is, if the MC is dead to you, he is. (In my original envisionment, entering the backrooms was his death before death of sorts. It means there is no more choices upon entering the backrooms.)
It's this kinda odd type of article that leaves the reader to fill in the blanks in the way they see fit.
So if he died in some way without getting the change of being knocked out, would that mean time paradox? (Or something might mess up reality)
Well, depends what you see fit. If you think he's in a time loop dieing just means waking up again. Similarly, if you believe the MC is already dead and this level acts similar to the grave, they would just wake up again. If they're just lost and that's what you believe, than maybe they go to the grave. All depends what you believe!
About the entering backrooms is death, it made me think of something, What if the backrooms, as a whole, was hell that people Arrived when they have died (due to committing sins or are bad people)? (their minds thinking they noclipped into the backrooms, but in actuality they died) and when they died in the backrooms, they are sent to some sort of unique level, giving out the “every death in backrooms is personalized” (aka the unique level they arrived upon death is personalized, similarly of that a purgatory being personalized and unique) but somehow level 401 and level the grave is known and are in the wiki, giving off some mystery on how they are known (this is honestly some neat canon that someone can do)
I already gave it an 8/10 in the draft state and it looks like monster actually listened to my suggestions here. I like this.
It has Liminal Echo - Phenomenon 5.
It has a play on "time."
It has my well-designed upvote.
Your friend and colleague,
Goerman
http://backrooms-wiki.wikidot.com/goerman
actually, liminal Echo is Phenomenon 7, while Phenomenon 5 is No-clipping
SPAG errors + writing feels more rushed the further you go into the page.
Great concept though. Would change to upvote if grammer is fixed.
(account deleted)Could you elaborate? Most of the SPaG stuff (such as the uses of both past and present text to insinuate that some of this stuff has kinda already happened as well as put the reader off when reading.) have uses here and are purposeful. The random capitalization of words to call specific pieces out, ect. Though, there could be stuffed that I personally missed.
I honestly love this tale! You have a great use of onomatopoeia (worded noises), which adds interest to the story.
SPOILER WARNING
I love how you end it with a vague yet definite end. Like, it is obviously a loop but you don't exactly know why it is a loop. Upvote from me.
Coming back to this a year later, and yeah, my opinion hasn't changed. As for SPAG errors, here are a few of the ones I caught upon an initial skim:
The sign, as expected, carried two messages, the first of which states "If you take this path, you will be met with a beast beyond comprehension," Below the message is an arrow pointing to the left.
Comma or colon after "states". Replace the comma after "comprehension" with a full stop since you capitalized "below" (and move the punctuation outside of the quotes).
You get close to the wall, Aware of the fact you're inches away from the tibial spikes and possible death.
Lowercase "aware".
Instantly, the impact of the situation hit you […]
[…] or the fact that it's better created than you could have remember.
"Than what you could have remembered"?
but then you notice the mannequins.
Capitalize "but".
Steaming pipes littered across the room, covering every single corner.
"Are" after "pipes"?
No hum buzz […]
Hyphen.
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