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Hey glad to see this level come back with so many improvements! I already stated my thoughts when I reviewed in sandbox, but to reiterate, good image game and quite the enjoyable read, especially from the moment the MC realises about level 0.
I see additional feedback from other critics has been applied too. In its state, this page feels like a cool, different take in the bait-and-switch "genre". Overall, way better than the original. +1.
Thank you for your help and crit, I appreciate you so much!
DivineAtlas
What a wonderful read!
Marvelous!
Encore!
So much of this resonates deep within me.
THANK YOU for making my day.
Your friend and colleague,
Goerman
http://backrooms-wiki.wikidot.com/goerman
Thank you so much for you kind words, I'm so happy you enjoyed my article. You just made MY day.
i like this more
+1
hi it is me aaron92
I love the idea of an entity that doesn't want to be alone, and the way you executed this concept was amazingly well made!
+1
I'm glad you enjoyed my level, thank you so much!
Anyway,the new version is better than the original one.
Cast off thy veil of ignorance and arrogance, for I shall not waste eloquence on deaf ears or closed minds. Go forth, and trouble me no more with thy insipid company.
I'm glad to hear it, I spent a lot of time reworking it. Thank you for reading!
Very effective. Unsettling in a manner faithful to the mood of the Backrooms.
I'm glad you enjoyed the article, thanks so much for reading it!
didnt know my mom was a backrooms entity
Thank you so much, I'm glad you enjoyed it! It went through several iterations and I'm very proud of the product
Amazing concept and it was executed greatly. I love these levels that trick you and the level is just great.
Thank you so much for your kind words. I thought a lonely entity would be a neat way to have a level sort of trick you, I'm glad you enjoyed the reveal!
interesting concept, underdeveloped execution.
-1
How is it underdeveloped?
most of the woman's motivations get expressed through her monologue: she wants the wanderer to remain in the level so she wouldn't be alone. it could be intriguing if you showed her taking steps towards this beyond the initial illusion, like trying to knead bread out of the ash around her house or scrawl past wanderers names on the walls of the burnt house (given her shape-shifting implies she has psychic abilities). currently, the level itself has little to do with the theme of abandonment, aside from the scratched-out family pictures.
i also had a few minor nitpicks with some of the throwaway lines. firstly, how would one confuse the entity into dropping its guard? does it involve, for instance, playing dumb in response to any level of interaction? secondly, when the woman reappears, how does she offer advice to the wanderer? my first reaction to that information was that it might be a bit awkward, considering the wanderer just ejected her from their mind and made her inconsolable. some elaboration on these areas could make the clinical section clearer.
overall, the narrative sections help lay out the groundwork of the story, but the page feels like it's rushing through its clinical parts until the narrative could pick up again. nothing in the clinical section itself is anything new to the reader; we already learn the entity's goals and gimmick with the environment within the first div block. therefore, the bulk of the page drags and opens up more confusion than answers.
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