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So hi, figured I would do this! Haven't done one of these before but with the posting of this one, I figured I would make one.
This is my attempt to diverge from a lore-filled entry, so if it seems lacking of a major story, that's why! I hope it is still enjoyable nonetheless though!
If there are any issues with how it looks, please let me know and I can patch it up! (And yes, I know the image is currently broken, idk why it's doing that TToTT) Disregard the prior statement, special thanks to userunhacked for patching that up for me!!!
While I found the tone odd for a bit, I quickly started enjoying it, and the note at the end genuinely got me. Maybe it has to do with the whole "continuity" theme of infinite stairs, and it's been applied to life here? Neato :}
Minimalism at its finest. Reminds me, obviously, of the 64-bit integer limit level on Fandom. How can I not like some bunch of funny stairs? Love the concept. The weather effects added that varying effect that avoids for the level to fall into mundane territory, and differenciates both entries with ease, good job.
Gotta admit that something like an audio log would have been nice to add, to further complete the page. But it's fine, don't worry.
+1 From me.
Edit: holy shit my bad, didn't see there was indeed an additional note at the bottom of the page.
Aaaand it adds an uncanny atmosphere that makes the entry even better! Good stuff man.
Different… in a good way.
Your friend and colleague,
Goerman
http://backrooms-wiki.wikidot.com/goerman
Back on another level binge! This was a short yet incredible read, which was definitely refreshing after going through long-winded writes with lots of notes and logs. Please do more short entries like this if you get the inspiration, this is a gem.
10/10
Pretty ok, just two points I need to mention
1) I'm not exactly too invested in physics to understand if it is technically possible, but I don't think that electricity can conduct over an infinitely long conductor due to resistance and whatnot, so the whole level dying due to a thunder strike is a bit far fetched.
2) Something about the writing feels a bit off, namely due to how some parts are italicised or made bold (though there are other factors at play that I can't quite put my finger on at the current moment, im writing this at 7:30 in the morning and am somewhat groggy). It makes some parts feel a bit melodramatic, and makes it feel a bit like the paragraphs are just building to a vine boom sfx chills top 15 burger king foot lettuce type 'reveal' that's supposed to dramatise it, which is a good technique don't get me wrong, but it works less in abundance and more at crucial points in storytelling rather than part of the main descriptions.
Other than those two points though, I don't have much negative to say about this. If anything, I'm quite excited to see another take on shortform articles that actually does it well. The note at the end very much put it all together, and the rest of the description is pretty compelling. Despite its flaws I'm pretty content to give it an upvote.
There are roads,
a samurai must travel…
An "extremely easy" entrance to a deadzone?
It will cause a panic.
This level manages to capture that good ol' liminal feel really well, on top of that just being a really awesome concept that I very much dig. +1
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