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Greggita Mahayfaio,
Let's get my primary negative out of the way first. I have never been a fan of animated skeletal beings or creatures. For many reasons. Having said that, I realize that this is your vision and not mine.
Your writing, coupled with my life experience, enabled me to see and smell the tar. I was able to feel the desperation and hopelessness of such a place. This earned you your +1.
We all become better writers by reading and writing.
You are quite the inspiration.
Keep up the good work!
Your friend and colleague,
Goerman
http://backrooms-wiki.wikidot.com/goerman
Nice level, I plan to rewrite Level 34 and combine with the OG Level 41: "Draining Darkness".
I'm interested. When I saw lvl 34 and original 41 I disliked them for how simple and similar to each other where. I wonder how you are going to improve lvl 34
Original level 41 was shit. This is way better +1'd
the thing i love about boring's pages is how she adds tons of details to pages
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This levels’ hostility is not overly supernatural, which is interesting. Its a good concept that is helped along with a solid number of images and a great amount of detail. Only issue is the writing is a bit amateurish, though still better written than many other levels
The prose is vivid, and the narration seamlessly transports you into a world of boiling dangers. The page feels alive in a sense, which is fitting considering how reactive 41 is. Now, let me take a moment to highlight some of my favorite lines:
The depth of the tar itself is remarkably shallow, which allows for the geography of hot, charcoal coloured sands to periodically pierce through the surface of the tar and form small, patchy islands in various, spread out clusters.
How did you think of this? It's so dream-like, with a surreality I'd love to see in more Backrooms levels. And also:
Traversal across Level 41 is incredibly difficult, and individuals who survive its boiling tar and intoxicating fumes will usually exit the level with burn marks, cuts, or charred soles of their shoes.
Mhm, yes. Suffering.
If I had any nitpicks, it'll be that this has some definite weak points outside of the way the words flow. The "groups tried to go in that place and all died" trope is done better in other levels. Anyways, this page is Lute-approved.
+1
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