Looking for critique please!!!
http://backrooms-sandbox-2.wikidot.com/thegamemaster222
Enjoy reading! :)
Entity 684
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Summary:
I've finished writing a entity known as "the takers" and it's now ready for critique!
Before Read, I'm sorry about misspelled
I'm doesn't write anything on the wiki, I've experience but not for kind of other opinion but still.
I think the image is too basic, Not like the description but about float, There's a code for a image (Backrooms wiki) smilar to SCP, and one of snippets code, There's a description under it, Which is alway been using you can get them here or below here
[[include :backrooms-wiki:component:hinc]]
[[include component:image-block
name=http://backrooms-wiki.wdfiles.com/local--files/level-0/Thebackrooms.jpg|
caption=The first picture ever taken of **Level 0**.
]]Basically at "name=" put the link of your photo and "caption=" write anything you want, But recommend to not writing long text, It does not broke the image but making it weird
Usually Behavior will come before Description as both of them always long explaintion (if the entity isn't that mystery), Little need more biology as the strike-text will be alot cool if there're text under it
Like this:
a little goblin-like creature with green skin and one singular eye
The report isn'r been confirmed by the M.E.G yet.
Have footnote would be nice
At Habitat yes there's a page using "-" but in this case that isn't only just a level number, I suggest to use ":"
Additional
* If you are okay using the theme, It's cool
Also since the staff said to put your sandbox in one sandbox page like draft version or tab, So i think you have to make your sandbox page for preparing the draft and original page (Actually there no need original page because you can fully edited your own page later if it's already greenlit)
That's my opinion which is VERY long spellin ever.
Whatever I critique back in 2023 IS NOT working out, sorry about it tho.
Kitachi
Hey buds, dunno what I was thinking back then. But my critique IS REALLY not working out. But, seeing this in 2023 and especially the past made me wanna blow up
Might as well keep it as a memory of that: I once do 'this' before :/
Kitachi
Edit: The page is poorely written and its picture is too big, the author did not really expand on it. But it was written before the Forum rules were changed :/
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