The general rule of thumb is this: “When in doubt, boil the water.”
this feels like a tone break. A quote like this doesnt fit within clinical tone, instead it would be more logical for the document to say something like "It is generally recommended to boil the water whenever possible." Which you say later. So why include this part in the first place? What does it add aside from the tone break?
on for the average, healthy person. Despite being the first object ever discovered by The M.E.G., it is still unknown exactly how this is possible.
same issue I have in other parts. Just uses "this is unknown".
traces of things
Things is a tonebreaker and shouldn't be used.
this does not appear to alter the flavor or taste as it would be expected to.
Generally clunky wording. Could be just "this doesn't alter the flavor or taste" Using stuff like "appear to alter" adds unnecessary wordiness when it is completely uneeded and adds no new information to the statement.
mixture
Solution would be a better word in this situation.
This has lead some suspicious researchers
Adding suspicious here is almost completely pointless. It impacts the tone because "suspicious" is not clinical in the slightest and saying just researchers would read better in general.
anomalous substance that resembles it. Much of this has yet to be confirmed.
These two sentences could easily be connected, which would be a lot better for flow.
Almond water is generally the most popular item used in bartering as well.
The "as well" makes this sentence read very awkwardly. Removing it would do wonders for making the sentence read better.
Almond water is generally the most popular item used in bartering as well. Since a standardized currency across multiple levels is generally impossible, many wanderers resort to bartering, thus leading to the object having some economical value. Almond Water is one of the most commonly traded items in places such as Level 5.1 and The Trader’s Vault; the object is usually used similarly to a single standardized unit of currency, such as 1 dollar, euro, or pound. Many groups of interest and communities value objects offered in bartering in comparison to almond water. It is recommended that wanderers carry a sizable quantity of Almond Water on heavily settled levels such as Level 11 or Level 6.1 due to it being the most generally preferred standardization of trade value.
This whole paragraph just sorta continues to state the same thing over and over. Again and again, it tells you that almond water is used for trading. It doesn't really matter that its recommended specifically for highly populated levels. If its so heavily used for trading, that can be assumed. This whole paragraph feels overly long considering it basically continues to tell the reader the same thing.
recreational purposes that it can provide.
"That it can provide" isn't really necessary here either. It also just sort of makes the sentence longer and more clunky.
Many wanderers cite their enjoyment of them due to the general familiarity that they provide, being common in works such as the recipes in Object 56.
Shouldn't this be placed before the mention of different colored bottles, since it goes back to a topic mentioned earlier?
In juxtaposition to most powerful, anomalous, and more often than not dangerous objects that are common throughout The Backrooms, almond water usually provides effects that normal, every-day drinks would provide naturally.
Again, I don't see the need for the general length of this. What it states is honestly not that impactful and half of the sentence could pretty much be removed with only the bottom have really conveying good information to the reader.
Originally, it was presumed that the bottles had some sort of anomalous property attached to them, or that they acted more akin to a potion of sorts.
This sentence is kind of confusing..maybe its just me but I fail to understand exactly what it is trying to convey. Isn't it possibly anomalous? Isn't that stated earlier? What about it being "more akin to a potion"? I fail to understand that what that means.
it was found that this was far from the case, and rather accomplished via small doses of natural substances that are dissolved into the liquid inside. Despite this, it is still unknown exactly how and why said auxiliary substances are in the drink to begin with and why they aren’t scientifically extractable.
How did they find this information out? Especially if they cant extract them, how would they ever measure it to figure out they exist at all? Also, uses more "this is unknown" explanations.
Nevertheless, Almond Water is completely potable in all regular circumstances.
I fail to understand why this was necessary to state again when it is already stated a lot in other parts of the article.
aside from simply satiating hunger.
Once again, this is stated earlier in the same paragraph. No reason to restate it again.
It is also not recommended to abuse this variant of Almond Water
Saying also implies it was stated somewhere earlier to not abuse a different variant when it wasn't. Just remove the also and move it a paragraph down or something.
as abuse could lead to infections, pneumonia, and even cancer if abused for long enough.
Why would it lead to this?
The skin stealers page is never linked.
Lastly, I want to touch on the inconsistent capitalization of almond water.
Aight that's about all I have to say, concept was fine so got no issues with that and any other issues were touched on pretty well by others.
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