Backrooms level 114 critque, or greenlight

Summary:

Trying to make level 114 and hopefully get it uploaded to the wikidot

Backrooms level 114 critque, or greenlight

Kailen 04 Mar 2022 11:07

http://backrooms-sandbox-2.wikidot.com/kailen-2

Re: Backrooms level 114 critque, or greenlight

NavyEOD_24 04 Mar 2022 17:16

This… really needs work. I couldn't read through it all because I was just lost with what I was reading. There are far too many commas, no establishment of tone, poor writing quality, and just an overall lack of polishing.

This needs to be proof-read by someone before being considered for greenlighting.

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Re: Backrooms level 114 critque, or greenlight

Kailen 04 Mar 2022 23:29

Ok i'll get mt friend working on that since we agreed I would write it all out and come up with the idea's he would make it sound better and do that grammar

Re: Backrooms level 114 critque, or greenlight

Zanilo 06 Mar 2022 16:45

I can get at least the atmosphere you have here and I like it, despite the reading rooms being completely different from the rest of the level. But the text looks like a lot of topics squeezed into a paragraph.

Re: Backrooms level 114 critque, or greenlight

Kailen 07 Mar 2022 08:57

The reasoning for the reading area's being completely different is because I couldn't find an image of a dark reading area, if I find one i'll change it