The Emerald loops

Summary:

A new Backrooms sub level for Level 0

The Emerald loops

j brian 28 Feb 2022 22:20

The level is full of hallways that have green lightbulbs in them and the level is similar to Level 0, except it has entities. The level is actually finite instead of infinite. Only floor 0, and floors 500 through 999 have been explored. http://backrooms-sandbox-2.wikidot.com/j-brian/edit/true/title/j%20brian

Last edited on 28 Feb 2022 22:24 by j brian Show more

Re: The Emerald loops

YourWeirdPlant 28 Feb 2022 23:12

Please try expanding on it a little more, because rn it’s very short.
Only floor 0, 500-900 have been explored. Well, that went from 0 to 500 real fast

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Last edited on 28 Feb 2022 23:13 by YourWeirdPlant Show more

Re: The Emerald loops

NavyEOD_24 28 Feb 2022 23:21

There's almost nothing here in its current state. There's an overuse of commas, flow errors, and it just stops at entities. The idea also feels overdone. 1001 floors, people disappear on them, so on so forth. It's not unique at all. I highly recommend either expanding on this and making it unique somehow, or scrapping this and going for something else. That's the first time I've recommended someone to scrap something, but this feels that overdone that I can't say just "revamp it" like I usually do.

Regardless of my harsh barrage, keep your head high and continue writing.

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Re: The Emerald loops

j brian 03 Mar 2022 00:30

Actually, that was only just the beginning and it is being fixed and revamped.

Re: The Emerald loops

NavyEOD_24 03 Mar 2022 00:41

Great to hear you're still going for it

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