Level critics

Summary:

I'd like to know how I can improve my level further down the line.

Level critics

spacexdavid123 27 Feb 2022 00:55

http://backrooms-sandbox-2.wikidot.com/spacexdavid1
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My level

Re: Level critics

NavyEOD_24 27 Feb 2022 01:12

- There's a lot of work needed here. The core idea needs to be expanded upon, and one paragraph in a bullet point really won't work.
- We also don't use Reddit names anymore, so it's best to replace that with just "wanderer"
- The article uses a lot of run-off sentences which just ruin the flow. They need to be combined and expanded upon to be effective.
- We have our fair share of basement levels, so this feels… overdone and generic.

Don't let these crits discourage you, though! Read through what we have on the wiki and see what has been done, what hasn't and what intrigues you! You can even pick up a few tricks by reading articles, like how to do better flow and coding!

Keep writing! ^^

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