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Reading this level was an overall unenjoyable experience for me. It was solid at the beginning, and while there was a lack of motion at the start, it read smoothly, if a bit uneventful. I do wish that the Securitus app was placed before the end of the article instead of all the way down near the bottom. This app is one of the more unique features of the level and should be showcased. Before I reach it, I have to slog through a lot of factual but uninteresting details before getting to the good part, and when I do reach it, it's underdeveloped outside of the logs.
Speaking of the logs, they were grammatically sound and well-formatted, but the juxtaposition was much too contrived for them to be believable or enjoyable. Especially the third one. That log was extremely hard to read because you typed out an accent to the point where it was almost illegible. The one-shot characters introduced in these logs are extremely one-dimensional, such as the scientist being ascribed the archetype of the verbose, formal living dissertation, and the… Scottish? person being extremely stereotypical. You do have a knack for details and exposition, but the dialogue and narrative element in this piece is lacking. If I removed the logs, the article comes off as very bare, but with them, it does not particularly add much narratively to the article other than a larger word count. The logs all try to distinguish themselves too much from the other logs, and in the process, none of them read like human experiences and feel very unnatural. From a simple syntax point of view, though, you're almost immaculate, so as long as you brush up on your diction and study character archetypes, narrative progression, and how to weave a story in an article like this, you should be set for further improvements in upcoming articles.
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