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Why does this remind me of summerween from gravity falls?
I like the ending, and there are some really good pieces of dialogue here. However, there's also a bunch of spelling errors, and it's really, really hard to tell who's talking at times. It was actually pretty confusing to read. Also, the pacing is really jumpy, especially during the ghost parts. It feels almost shoe-horned in in order to fulfill the quota of the classic story reference, but doesn't actually feel fleshed out beyond that. However, it still has its heartwarming merits, so I'll give it a no-vote
Thanks for the crit! (and can you point out the spelling errors so that I can fix them?)
A few of the ones I caught:
The figure rises above the bed, a specter
missing period
"I guess now, I just need to wait for the other three."
unnecessary comma
Sitting on the bead, the Beast gets a knock on the door.
bed, not bead
The present two are at the crossroads now. They watch the past beast and the past spirit who in turn watch the child and the adult.
Inconsistent capitalization with Beast
a few of the ones I got B)
(account deleted)Really like the subtle worldbuilding and characterization of the Beast here.
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