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mincon entry, clocking in at 64 words! HUGE shoutout to stephlynch, whose css skills were absolutely vital—this level wouldn't exist without her ∴)
first image is my own creation, second image is a composite of these: https://www.flickr.com/photos/10559879@N00/268478728 https://www.flickr.com/photos/63106298@N02/8129485650
do my gay little computers make you mad? do they make you want to hurt me?
If that were the case, that’s a weird looking entity, but over all, good work
Great tier content, but jump scare really scare me :I
This was… holy crap, genuinely terrifying. From the graphic and unnerving descriptions to the jumpscare to the unsettling monster pic, this was amazing. instant +1 as soon as I can get this monster off my page.
Etoile this was like genuinely so cool. As usual, you killed it.
Easy +1
damn, that surprised me
+1
It looks like a Lobster.
Jokes aside, this was really good! Didn't get me as much since I saw the Sandbox Entry so I knew what was gonna happen. Lol
Instant +1
Definitely has some intrigue to it, but I feel it honestly mostly rides on the screen effect at the end. The random capitalized words and other characters kinda broke the flow for me personally.
The scariest part was hearing someone say "etoile is so good ze doesn't need crit". Regardless of community status that's not a good mindset.
-1 sorry
1. they're breaking the flow on purpose because of something overriding the document
2. unless i said that in the article i don't see why that should affect your vote. for the record i disagree with the statement
do my gay little computers make you mad? do they make you want to hurt me?
i'm going to have to respectfully disagree with your premise that this article is entirely "flow broken" because of the randomly capitalized letters and words. to me, that was one of the main factors which made me enjoy the article so much. it helped characterize the level in a unique way which i don't think could be done if it wasn't done the same way.
the biggest part of prose is making the prose be unique in some interesting way. if i were to read a book about crows, when i read another, i won't just wanting to be read the same crow story. sure, it can still be about crows, but i want something which makes it stand out in a beautiful manner. for example, one crow story could be about dead lovers, while the other can be about the thematic connections of the color black.
when reading this article, you have to understand that it is made up of mostly sensory feelings. the connection to the changing letters, to me, represented just how disattached those sensory feelings were getting. it was unique and made me personally follow along better, over if like, they just mixed some words up or something. it genuinely fit well for the buildup and the main punchline and dismissing it as a "loss of flow" is similar to making the argument that "all prose must be linear and straightforward and follows the rules of english," an argument which i personally find invalid and boring.
i urge you to read closer and reconsider your vote, as there is genuinely a lot going on here in such a short amount of words.
regarding the whole second part of your comment, please don't make unnecessary callout comments like such. it can be considered rude and shouldn't have an impact on your vote as a reader.
bruh, it's literally an underdeveloped idea. you attributing value to it is no more valid to me attributing great political value to a children's song about ants. It's subjective, and clearly his opinion is that it isn't good.
I feel like his main point is that the article rides on the screen effect, which i completely agree with. The only thing that makes this article scary is the image - not reading the writing of the article and skipping to the image causes the exact same "jumpscare" effect. And yes, the image is effective, but isn't the point of a writing contest to make the best, I dunno, writing?
And as for the effect, it's a ripoff of an effect used by Jon Bois in 17776, so don't act like it's extremely original either. Also recommended to check out Jon Bois, cool guy.
As for the "callout post", you're overreacting to the dude having a few concerns about people who think someone who's famous should be able to bypass the process. It's not a callout to etolle, it's just raising a concern. I don't know how you can get that from it.
Their not famous, they have become popular due to their ability to write great articles, if you can prove you can write great articles you can earn a greenlight exemption because you deserve it. Also your writing is very aggressive for no reason, it was a microcon, they had to make a article with as little as possible, they did that via the jumpscare to make it stand out from the rest.
I'm justice!…What?…No not the blind folded girl!
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