(TRIMMED) Level 190 - "School Detention" / Discussion

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existence_null_01030 10 Nov 2020 18:00

First time publishing an entry here :D
I want to thank all the good peeps who helped me with the crits.

Images sources:

• Hallway was taken from Lorain High School hallway, by Matt Dempsey on Wikimedia Commons;
• exit was taken from Emergency Exit Doors (49399118683), by Mike Mozart on Wikimedia Commons;
• the third image, about the drawn signals, was made by me

Last edited on 16 May 2022 11:57 by existence_null_01030 Show more

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Epicgamer23 26 Jun 2022 06:38

the writing could be improved, at the moment it is very poor in places.

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noobers5008 08 Feb 2023 07:58

I agree, as a lot of the grammar is… special.

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BrO whAT 25 Mar 2025 16:13

I agree, most of the writing was redundant. With one of the phrases being "destroyed by unknown means" and a footnote being "it is unconfirmed which entity did it" is saying the same thing twice. The concept is a good idea but could def use some grammar and writing improvements. Keep improving!

PyroTheAroAce 18 Apr 2023 18:55

Oi mate level 52 has been deleted to the snow level.

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From Pyro AroAce, that one trans guy.

1:00 am binge-read session

centurys lute 06 Dec 2024 19:53

2020 nothingburger. be more original.

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