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Excellent question to be honest. I'm guessing they will make this a sublevel of the new normal level. I hope so at least. It's weird if this stays as level -4.1


- Univ

Re: hmm by Univ - Wise ExplorerUniv - Wise Explorer, 04 Oct 2023 08:49

meow


- Univ

Re: meow by Univ - Wise ExplorerUniv - Wise Explorer, 04 Oct 2023 08:45

You can post the idea/article in the forums here but since there's not much activity on those forums I recommend going on the discord server and posting it there. People will give their thoughts which should answer your question and give you good ideas for improvment


- Univ

Ok, thanks! I'll make sure to put some emotion into the notes.


@pearbranch14823

have a few people read the article and ask them how they feel about it


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- Demoman TF2

You remove the part that says "Source link" and credit the appropriate person (whether you or your friend) in the "author" part. If you want to, you can put something like "original image" after the source link part.

Hey!

I just want to say I am NOT a Greenlighter, nor a staff member. However, I have a few suggestions to your article.

This article is, first of all, a wonderful idea. The thought of never remembering a level you went to is kind of unsettling, like a bad dream you forget. But, while reading the article, I noticed it seemed… incomplete.

Before I even think to get into the nitty-gritty of SPaG critique, I want to ask you to tell me whether or not the article is conveying what you want it to convey. It should be unsettling, I'm guessing, and make the reader feel unsafe. You need to convey that through words; proper use of adjectives, mostly. Think about what makes you feel scared. What do you feel? What do you hear? Smell? See? Use… your… senses. What you sense is what makes you feel anything.

Incorporate fear into your article. Make the reader feel terribly sick, or scared, or anxious. Prey on common weakness.
An example would be;

I lay still on damp, yellowed carpet. A swinging light hangs above my head, and I wish it would fall on my head and crack to kill me. I sit across from the ever locked, taunting door. The handle is a shade of choppy orange and brown. The smell of ozone and rust is all I have to focus on, nowadays. The ivory walls feel as if they shift every minute. A high-pitched ringing fills my head, and it spins as the knife I'm clenching digs one more long, tally-slit into my forearm. The blade has stared to rust, and so has my blood. We're turning old, together, I thought, detached. My mouth tasted of sweet metal.

The rusted handle turns from the other side. Perhaps it knows I'm rusting too slowly.

In this example, and you don't have to use one thing, the fear I used was rust. Many people I know are afraid of coming in contact with rust. Why? I dunno, it's dirty, the result of oxidization, brown and terra cotta; it's just disgusting, to some.

Try to give some thought as to how you will do this. Get back to me when you have an idea of your approach to rattle the reader. I know what I just gave you isn't a lot to work with, so ask me any questions you have about this.

Yes, you would be paralyzed for 7 years if you swallow gum

Re: 7 years by CriminalOfLiminalCriminalOfLiminal, 03 Oct 2023 20:07

I am not sure what crosses the line when writing an unsettling article. On one hand, it could be so deeply upsetting it makes the reader sick to their stomach. On the other hand, it could be so deeply cringy it makes the reader sick to their stomach from laughter.

Does anyone have any ideas as to how one could distinguish this line? Thanks.

Let's say I escape Level 9 with the pocket in possession, and I want to go back to Level 9 for some reason; I give the pocket to a trustworthy person to watch it for me and enter Level 9. Will The Neighborhood Watch immediately kill me even if I don't have the pocket with me currently?

SEARCHING. CRITICS. by Error012Error012, 03 Oct 2023 17:23
SEARCHING. CRITICS. by Error012Error012, 03 Oct 2023 17:23
SEARCHING. CRITICS. by Error012Error012, 03 Oct 2023 17:22
SEARCHING. CRITICS. by Error012Error012, 03 Oct 2023 17:21

If the image used in an article I made was either made by me or made by a friend and I was allowed to use it but the image hasn't appeared elsewhere thus not giving me a source to link it to what do I do? do I just put a fancier version of "this is the first appearance of this image" in the licence box or? sorry if this is a stupid question.

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Yoink_Fricc06Yoink_Fricc06 03 Oct 2023 17:14
in discussion Meta / Per page discussions » Level -0

Its certainly a level alright.


yoink_

novote by Yoink_Fricc06Yoink_Fricc06, 03 Oct 2023 17:14
hmm
Yoink_Fricc06Yoink_Fricc06 03 Oct 2023 17:01
in discussion Meta / Per page discussions » Level -4.1

Whats to become of this level now that -4 was remade into a normal level?


yoink_

hmm by Yoink_Fricc06Yoink_Fricc06, 03 Oct 2023 17:01
Re: -1
Yoink_Fricc06Yoink_Fricc06 03 Oct 2023 16:54
in discussion Meta / Per page discussions » Level 201

the most incorrect statement ive ever read


yoink_

Re: -1 by Yoink_Fricc06Yoink_Fricc06, 03 Oct 2023 16:54
+1
Yoink_Fricc06Yoink_Fricc06 03 Oct 2023 15:49
in discussion Meta / Per page discussions » Level 201

Image or no image, this level still slaps.


yoink_

+1 by Yoink_Fricc06Yoink_Fricc06, 03 Oct 2023 15:49

Too short and has too many SPaG errors.
I'll come back and edit this next week with in-depth critique.


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-1 by PenOrSaber1PenOrSaber1, 03 Oct 2023 14:02
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