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literally all of this
literally all of this
changing to a downvote because lmao
Eyy.. i just typed a loada garrbagge
yay! ^_^
I will use this in my next phenomenon article :)
No, but you could see what's behind a corner without physically peeking your head out
Thank you so much!
i love this level its mega good OMG but like if theres any lore then what the fricking
'fuck'
'shit'
'hell'
'multiversal shitty worldbuilding'
is going on??????
Ok! I'll make sure to polish it a bit more :]
@pearbranch14823
Ignoring the various SPaG errors, I think this page just needs a bit more polishing. We barely get to know this character, and then all of a sudden, the story ends. Not to mention that it feels incredibly mundane. This story is just about the same as any other person entering the Backrooms, there really isn’t anything that makes it unique.
I will say that your writing style with this is quite nice. You take on the voice of the protagonist well, and I applaud you for that.
I hope to see this get rewritten one day, but for now, I don’t think this is quite ready for the site.
This theme is supposed to be a GOI theme but it doesn’t have any trace of that GOI aside from the header and maybe the colors. The banner at the top is also WAY too busy.
No, we don’t allow AI on this site, and this page exceeds AI’s writing capabilities.
Name: mMeZmErIzE (Necrotic Anomaly on Discord)
Will Crit: Anything not listed in "Won't crit"
Won't crit: Themes, Phenomena and stuff where SPaG barely exists.
Strengths: Levels and Tales
Weaknesses: Entities and Objects (Still happy to critique them though!)
*Likes:** Horror, History, Mythos
Dislikes: Comedy (Don't dislike it, just harder to critique), Anything using modern slang (Ski, Sig** and so on)
How to Contact: A Wikidot PM is fine, but I will respond to Discord faster.
Availability: Somewhat limited (On NZ time, and have other stuff to do)
Is this page writed with ai
This is quite an interesting page, especially from a philosophical perspective. It would be very difficult to persuade those people that the Frontrooms is a real, because while you can say them forgetting about the Frontrooms is a simply some strange phenomenon of the Backrooms, from their perspective they could think that having memories of the Frontrooms is also just some strange phenomenon. They could think that all the memories of the Frontrooms were implanted into people's head when they were "spawned into existence" in Level 0, and there would not be much of a way to argue against that.
Hey Spectre48, thanks for the crit.
I understand what you are getting at. If I've somehow made the article confusing or hard to understand, I'm very sorry, but I actually wanted to build the level so that the more you stay in the level and don't find the exit, the more you randomly forget something. Mainly, I didn't want to focus on a specific identity or anything, but that can also be the case. In that sense, it depends on whether you survive the level or not, i.e. that one is only completely wiped out and forgotten if the character doesn't make it in time and it's already too late.
The main goal in that sentence, I want to interpret/depict it that way, that two sisters one before and the other just happened to enter the level and then it was too late for the other sister who entered this level before, after a short time after the other sister had entered it, anyway, and when she was then erased from existence, the other sister then can no longer remember that she once had a sister.
It's basically a WIP that I will continue to work on, since I want to revise the site at some point anyway. But thought I'd release it first since there was a contest going on anyway, so I can fine tune it accordingly.
However, thank you very much for your suggestion, I will keep that in mind for this page. ^^
goofy story
the titles on themselves can also be a goofy one
cool +1
-The infamous radioactive piece of bread.
So I though that the level in general has an lost about all the experiences, knowledge etc. that happens by progess while onbeing, and then the fact of suffering the consequences if you don't make it out of the level in time, which then ends with you, so it's kinda a variation of Deadzone, because everything in this level ends at the earliest or at the latest, regardless of whether man or material.
Maybe those prompts may fit?
Thanks for your review, my dear friend ReyDay :)
The inspiration comes from a similar backroom level in the Fandoms where you age, while onbeing in the level. However, conceptually I wanted to do something with time anyway, so this level with reflowing time suddenly came to mind.
In general, yeah the previous articles that was more due to my excitement over why I messed it up. Because this was my first time ever in my life, that i participate in a certain thing… and thanks for the little touches you've add :)
In Spag-terms, I'm using the Grammatic checker, and a additional tool so i let doublechecking the articles, as you recommended it then.
For the critpoints, yeah about the entity section, I can understand it, I thought I should add it, but taking into account for future articles
Thanks again for your kind words, and I'm glad you enjoyed reading it. :D
The roads go in circles. There are too many entities to count. And insanity is closer than you think. Do you think it's worth finding an exit to the backrooms? That's up to you.
http://backrooms-sandbox-2.wikidot.com/mmezmerize
Essentially, never-ending entities infest neighbourhoods, with an entity that may end up turning you into one of them. With lots of darkness and the chance of going to the mysterious level "Under the Car," is it worth it to find the vending machine and "Sanctuary" or possibly even escape from the bacrooms? Probably not. But are people gonna try anyway? Hell yeah!
Mostly looking for places it may be repetitive or drawn out. Also, SPaG help would be nice.