in discussion Writing Help / Help: Draft Critique » Entity #37 - Need greenlit
So, as it is right now, there just isn't enough in the article for me to greenlight it. Right now it's a description of a spooky thing that kills you, and that just isn't enough. There is some potential here though, but you definitely need to add something. If I were you, I would add some sort of log of someone who is exploring the level and encounters one of them. I feel like it could be interesting to show someone's experience of trying to stay calm in a situation where they are essentially walking on eggshells. It's your choice though, but you definitely need to add something more. Let me know if you add something, and I can take another look!