{SEEKING GREENLIGHT} Level 950 - The Fictitium Void
{SEEKING GREENLIGHT} Level 950 - The Fictitium Void
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Summary:
It's the 8th of 8th of 8th time I do this! Again, this is my first level on the site, and I would love to see some amazing critique on it. What did I do wrong? What can I add? What typos did I make? Would this be okay to put on the site? See for yourself by clicking the link to my level, looking through the page inside of that link, and typing your thoughts on your very own reply. It's very appreciative if you do.
Would you like me to critique this? I'm a greenlighter now(which means if I think it is of high qaulity, I can greenlight it for you, if you so wish), and to be honest, you've put a lot of effort into this. I'll take a read and tell you what I think sometime tomorrow if I can.
Just a high schooler who thinks he is good at writing. Likes working on a lot of stuff, ranging from writing for the Backrooms Wiki, to providing critique, and reading. ~ Pen.
"The truth is the truth. What changes is what we know about it and what we're willing to believe."
- Jonathan Maberry, Rot and Ruin
Yes, you can.
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Added to queue, I'll get started on it soon.
Just a high schooler who thinks he is good at writing. Likes working on a lot of stuff, ranging from writing for the Backrooms Wiki, to providing critique, and reading. ~ Pen.
"The truth is the truth. What changes is what we know about it and what we're willing to believe."
- Jonathan Maberry, Rot and Ruin
To be honest, as I don't really see any problems with this grammatically, so I'm just going to ask you a few questions real quick, and once I'm satisfied, I'll give you the greenlight.
- Why would these gods write about this place and describe the possible experience of a wanderer who happened to enter the place?
- Are they indifferent to people who dying in the void?
- Do they want people to come in the level or do they want them to stay away?
You've already told me that these gods are the ones who wrote this document, but that just leaves me questions about their motives for creating this document. That's really it.
This is a really good read and I think it will do good on-site.
Just a high schooler who thinks he is good at writing. Likes working on a lot of stuff, ranging from writing for the Backrooms Wiki, to providing critique, and reading. ~ Pen.
"The truth is the truth. What changes is what we know about it and what we're willing to believe."
- Jonathan Maberry, Rot and Ruin
Q: Why would these gods write about this place and describe the possible experience of a wanderer who happened to enter the place?
A: It's mostly complicated. Maybe they are trying to warn others to stay away, maybe they are the only ones that are capable of documenting this place and took some eerie notes based on an unlucky visitor. Nobody really knows – not even me – but I guess that somewhere in between those possible answers, that's the answer you're looking for.
Q: Are they indifferent to people who are dying in the void?
A: No. This place is meant to be their home and they would stay alert for those who enter this place.
Q: Do they want people to come in the level or do they want them to stay away?
A: They want them to stay away. If anyone does enter this place, either on accident or on purpose, they will punish them by condoning them to rot in the Fictitium Void forever. They would also refuse to give them any information about an exit. When those gods wrote this document and sent it to the database, they did not intend on showing an exit and decided to say that there was no exit.
Thanks for your time. You are free to greenlight this.
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Okay, thanks for your answers! That pretty much clear up anything I had.
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Have fun finally posting this! :D
Just a high schooler who thinks he is good at writing. Likes working on a lot of stuff, ranging from writing for the Backrooms Wiki, to providing critique, and reading. ~ Pen.
"The truth is the truth. What changes is what we know about it and what we're willing to believe."
- Jonathan Maberry, Rot and Ruin
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