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Does a good job of evoking emotion and I like when a page makes me feel something so +1
theres a ton of emotion to be felt here, but theres not enough for the actual level itself
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The article structure felt a bit off and I'm not sure why. Because of the fact that I literally don't know why it felt weird, and that is literally my only complaint. +1
Fun to read, (probably) fun to write.
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- Jonathan Maberry, Rot and Ruin
I've never liked this one. It feels wayyy too cheesy and fake for my taste and the overall vibe isn't very good. I would ask for a rewrite but I also very much dislike the concept. -1
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Oh, this one is almost wonderful. First, to start with the parts I like: the opening description. It's simple but effective at conveying the horror of the forest, and sets a good first impression with the reader, beckoning them on for things to come. Unfortunately, the following paragraph slips back into clichés of the early levels.
If you treat her with respect, then she may let you go, but if you do not, she will command the trees to rip you limb from limb in a second.
If you treat [powerful entity] with respect, then good thing. If you treat [powerful entity] with no respect, then bad thing. The page seems afraid of fully committing to the folklore-esque narration. The ending section is easily the strongest part of the entry, and it shows us the power of the skeleton queen better than the half-clinical description ever could.
Overall, -1.
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